Trailer - Verbal Audience Feedback

Production- First Draft Trailer review 

Tinika and I, along with other students, were asked to put together our first draft. This was so we could all critique the work we had put together and receive constructive criticism.

We showed our trailer in class and got feedback from our peers and teacher, we recorded the response: We were put in top Band 2, which was quite disappointing because we thought we had some good qualities. We will use this feedback to improve our trailer significantly.
We worked really hard and felt quite disheartened. However, this feedback will allow us to edit and change our film trailer for the better and hopefully we will be able to achieve a better grade. 
The main points of concern we received from other students and our teacher were:

1. Repetitive scenes 
2. Add a binoculars section 
3. Film more scenes focusing on the antagonist or a side-line story of our protagonist’s relationship with someone else 
4. Make the fact that our plot includes our antagonist deafening her 
5. Darken the lighting of some scenes 
6. Finish our voice overs for the beginning section 

This gave us enough to work with in terms of changing things, re-filming and adding a few more scenes or sections. Hopefully this will allow us to improve our grade. 

The first thing we plan on doing to make in terms of making improvements is the editing itself. This involves the changing of the lighting; we will do this by editing the brightness of particular scenes and deleting the repetitive scenes so we have a rough estimate of how much more we need to film. We have an opportunity to film a new side-line story which will involve our protagonist having a relationship with a new character, if we need to add more time to our trailer. 
This will allow us to move on to the next stages which is the filming of new scenes. This will involve both our existing characters and possibly a new character. This character will be linked to our protagonist. After all of this has been completed, we will focus on the voice overs of the characters, especially the beginning section with the emergency dispatcher. These will help us to establish the beginning sequence and make the editing smoother. We can also remove the text that is on screen which, from our feedback, we found out is too much for the audience to see along with the running sequence of our protagonist.
 We have not yet decided if we will include the binocular section as we are unsure how professional it will look. If all goes well, then yes we will include this in our film trailer but, it isn't a necessity. We have taken all our feedback into consideration, for filming our second draft to ensure we reach a higher band